LOVE POEM..... is it good????

I cant get enough of you


Hearing your voice makes my day


Not hearing you will make my day blue


I promise you that I will always stay


Im stuck to you like if you were glue


Ill stay by us side even if I had to pay


You got no clue


You got no clue how much I love you


Im like a stray without you


So now I will pray


Today and everyday


So that everything will always be okay


Cuz you make my life complete


I dont even want to keep my love discrete


you are the reason I can stand on my 2 feet


without you my hearth wont even have a beat


Your love is so sweet


It almost feels like a treat


Now let me wrap you in my sheets


To protect you those mean streets


you are mine


I dont even need a receipt


Cuz I will never give you back


But I will always have ur back


And that is a fact


I am not trying to act


My love for you is so much it has to be stacked


My love is so strong it can never be cracked


Not even if there was a big impact


My love will always still be intact

LOVE POEM..... is it good????
ok iam going to just give a bit of feed back when it comes to writting poem its not something u do right off the bat most people they will tell u that a poem randomly comes and goes it could take up to a month just to write one poem





i can tell u sat there in one sitting iam not saying its bad i am just saying allow ur feeling and emotions to write it not ur mind


ur mind will only give u a certain extent for example did u find ur self sitting trying to find words to rhyme with with word like pure ramdom examle u say act u then u kinda go threw the alphabet by going hmm act mact no tact no shack no fact ohh there one it works but doenst bring out the best honestly allow every part of u to bring out the best it may take a day a week a month or a year but when it comes to poetry it is never predictable





it was a good poem it had strong and weak points


just work on


and all poems dont have to rhyme
Reply:Your love poem sounds very interesting. While I was reading


it, it sounded more like a rap song. It sounded really good to


rap to. Congradulations!!!!!!!!!
Reply:its kinda cheesyt.
Reply:it is a bit rhymy and a bit too long


overall i give it a B-
Reply:there's something wrong......... grammar?





it's like a narrative type........ it lacks some poetic phrases......





because...... i can't feel anything at all... while reading it....
Reply:you are trying to hard. relax %26amp; look it over. make a few changes. sorry:(
Reply:Keep practicing. I think you could do better.
Reply:YES!!! I like it. Just to let you know... poems don't have to rhyme.
Reply:it was ok but it didnt standout to me i couldnt feel you emotion cause i was stuck on your choice of words i think u need to dig just a lil deeper...but overrall good and keep trying♥
Reply:From the bottom of ur heart baby... u did good..


Like it cuz u r uneat about ur fellings.
Reply:Your love poem is o.k it's kind of boring and long but if I made one it won't be as good
Reply:If this is how you feel, this is how you feel! But I think you tried too hard to rhyme %26amp; lost your real feelings in the effort it took to find words that rhyme! You should search deeper %26amp; think about what your most intimate feelings are, then write. There are different types of poetry...every single line, doesn't have to rhyme, so just take a little time, And I bet you'll be just fine!
Reply:its okay...the part at the end about being intact is a little cheesy though.
Reply:It's your poem, your expression, and your creation.


How did your poem make you feel?


Perhaps you could read it for your writing group. See what they think.


Lila Griffin
Reply:Depending on your age
Reply:well.....its not bad